Oh, you wacky lil critter. I'm glad to hear you have thought through the issue with your scene - and that it only took a night to figure it out! You'd probably have a good chuckle if you knew how long it took me to figure out even some fairly unimportant scenes in some of my writing. At any rate, I'm going to sumbit a formal request for your anxiety to GTFO, as I am greatly enjoying the snippets of AG I'm getting to see :)
Re: dialogue and thinking about dialogue. It is definitely a delicate balance to strike, so I'm glad to hear you talking about pacing. You are 100% correct that there are times when you need to maintain the flow above noting every little character reaction. And you're equally right that at other times, it is important to include what your POV character is thinking, feeling, contemplating, etc. during the conversations.
By the way, I think I have your problem's photo negative, incidentally, as I have a really bad habit of breaking up the flow of dialogue with too much "and this is what he's thinking, and this is what she's doing with her hand, and this is what that bird outside the window is doing..." Apparently, my characters have as much attention deficit as I do?
Oh, and I totally think that 90% of everything anyone says is somehow speaking ill of me. Drives Steve nuts because he'll say, "Oh, crap, we forgot to put the movie in the mail" and my immediate response is "WELL I HAD TO GO TO WORK, SORRY IF I CAN'T REMEMBER TO DO EVERYTHING" ;_; *feelings of inadequacy for not remembeing important stuff like Netlix.* It is my hope, at any rate, that you will one day be at a point where you think well enough of yourself to realize that your friend was probably pleased at your above-average chattiness.
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Date: 2011-07-24 11:03 am (UTC)Re: dialogue and thinking about dialogue. It is definitely a delicate balance to strike, so I'm glad to hear you talking about pacing. You are 100% correct that there are times when you need to maintain the flow above noting every little character reaction. And you're equally right that at other times, it is important to include what your POV character is thinking, feeling, contemplating, etc. during the conversations.
By the way, I think I have your problem's photo negative, incidentally, as I have a really bad habit of breaking up the flow of dialogue with too much "and this is what he's thinking, and this is what she's doing with her hand, and this is what that bird outside the window is doing..." Apparently, my characters have as much attention deficit as I do?
Oh, and I totally think that 90% of everything anyone says is somehow speaking ill of me. Drives Steve nuts because he'll say, "Oh, crap, we forgot to put the movie in the mail" and my immediate response is "WELL I HAD TO GO TO WORK, SORRY IF I CAN'T REMEMBER TO DO EVERYTHING" ;_; *feelings of inadequacy for not remembeing important stuff like Netlix.* It is my hope, at any rate, that you will one day be at a point where you think well enough of yourself to realize that your friend was probably pleased at your above-average chattiness.