SMW (
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2012-09-14 12:07 am (UTC)
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Oof, there goes my perception of the arc. That's far less clean and far more realistic.
And, taking this as an example:
"Well I may have tuberculosis, so if I kill us both, sorry in advance."
I see what you're trying to do, I think; are you going for a natural rhythm? In any case, I would revise it to:
"Well, I may have tuberculosis, so if I kill us both? Sorry in advance."
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And, taking this as an example:
"Well I may have tuberculosis, so if I kill us both, sorry in advance."
I see what you're trying to do, I think; are you going for a natural rhythm? In any case, I would revise it to:
"Well, I may have tuberculosis, so if I kill us both? Sorry in advance."